New Poets Wednesday

Wind
by Jason Bradway

Casually caressing my skin
Racing through my hair
Dancing across the grass
Playfully swaying with no trace
Running through the trees
The leaves shiver with glee
The horses run with it
It makes me tremble with chill
Yet no where do I see
This creature that it is to be
Causing such commotion
With silence it can flee
Or howl in the darkness of night
Creating such emotions
With simplicity in its might
And if still it will no longer be

For more New Poets Wednesday Posts see garrycox.com
Submit poems to garrylcox@yahoo.com
The Bard of Appanoose

4 thoughts on “New Poets Wednesday

  1. I read Jason Bradway’s poem several times before getting the intent of the last line. Placing a mental comma after the word “still” finally gave me clarity. I understand (and respect) not using punctuation, but would suggest, for the sake of his intent, place “it will no longer be” free standing as your final line. It is a lovely work of imagery.

    Like

    1. Eileen, thank you for your most thoughtful, and I would assume, helpful response to Jason’s poem. I am not sure that the poets read and respond to comments. I don’t do it as much as I should. But I know that being read and reacted to is the lifeblood of any poet, old or new. I will work harder to encourage readers to comment and writers to look for those comments after they have been published here.

      Like

  2. I like lines one through seven. They evoke nice images. I am not clear about the intent of the rest of the poem. Is the aim to contrast the effects of a gentle breeze with those of the wind when it becomes powerful? If so, I would omit the line about trembling with chill (or possibly work it in later) and go to “yet in this I do not see the creature that it is yet can be, then follow with howling in the night …..

    I like the idea that, either gentle or powerful, the wind can arouse strong emotions.

    I was not an English major in school, and do not write poetry, so you can feel free to ignore my comments!

    Like

    1. Thank you for your excellent comments Jane. And speaking for poets in general, we don’t write for English majors. I can’t state with any certainty that the poet you’ve responded to will see this. Guess it depends on how tech and blog savy the poet is. What I can do is try to make it clear to poets and commentators that they can respond right on the post they are reading. Again, thank you for your interest and your comments.

      Like

Comments are closed.